IMS Draft 2


Feedback I Received 4/27


She liked the beginning – sounds and images. She suggests that I include some still images with voiceovers (similar to a documentary). I wasn’t sure how to do this, so she showed me how. I really like how it turned out. She also suggests that I include more images and videos, although they are hard to find. Also, she suggested I add a website at the end.


She also liked the beginning. It really touched her. She suggests I change the typeface and font during the video to something more serious and bold. She also suggests that I include names of other people in the video, not just the one guy. She also thinks this would make the work more credible.

Feedback I Gave 4/27


I really like your video! The footage you used it very clear and goes with the music very well. It creates a relaxing tone. I like the transitions between clips too. Even though they go from one to the next, I think it fits the feel of the video and the music too. I think you should mention who is sponsoring the video or what organization made it (like something you make up). You could put this at the end of the video. You could also mention that the bee population is declining, which is why we need to take action. When you say bees do a lot for us, you could mention specific things that they do. I think this will help people to see that there is a need and action needs to be taken.

Video Project Rough Draft

This is a rough draft for my video project. I opened it with images of prison and dramatic music in hopes to engage the audience from the get-go. I think I managed to do this by drawing on people’s emotions. I am still adding pieces from videos I have found on YouTube. I have many clips on there now that I need to edit and/or take out. They are in no certain order so I will need to edit them for my final project. I just wanted to place them in the video so I knew which ones I liked best out of all my options. I am also new to iMovie so I’m not sire if there’s another way around this.

I wanted to have a real prisoner’s experience in the video, so I am lucky to have found a Creative Commons video with a formerly incarcerated man speaking about his experience in prison. The purpose of my piece is to educate people about solitary confinement, the mental effects it has on prisoners, and how it has been a breeding ground for keeping people with mental illness confined in tight spaces in an inhumane way.

By watching the video, I hope people will take action to start ending it or maybe start learning about the prison system in general and its wrongdoings. Some hardships I have had when making this were finding videos and changing my storyboard. I originally wanted to include prisoners’ stories but thought that was a bit unethical. I also was not finding many pictures or videos of prisoners and/or solitary confinement on Creative Commons, so I needed to come up with alternatives.

Questions for peers:

  • does the music transition well (violin to piano)?
  • Is something missing from the video?

This piece that I found is about solitary confinement – what is is, who gets placed there, how many people are there, what it’s like to live there, etc. Currently between 80,000 and 100,000 people in the United States are living in solitary confinement. Most cells are between 6×9 and 8×10, which is quite small for a person to be spending on average 23 hours a day in there with little to nothing to do. It is a space that fosters the brain to become inactive, especially the brain’s sensory receptors. As humans, we need physical interaction from other humans (i.e. nurturing). In the environment of solitary confinement, none of this is had, which eventually leads to mental deterioration, especially if prisoners are not mentally stable in the first place.

This article is about a recent documentary that came out on HBO about solitary confinement titled “Solitary: Life Inside Red Onion State Prison.” This film shows the ins and outs of life in the hole (aka solitary confinement). Although the film is only about one prison in one state, similar solitary confinement facilities are built and used all around the country and the world. In this filmed, you’re “forced to see the humanity” of the prisoners, which is something I am trying to do with my video project. It shows us what is so common in our prisons today: ” this is what America does with its criminals: locks them up and then releases them, leaving them to their own devices.” Additionally, the article states that solitary confinement and is “an institution that by its very architecture aims to a break a person.”


April 25

At this point in my project, I am not using things that have been copyrighted. If I were to use them, I think I would use pictures or stories about prisoners to educate my audience. According to the Best Practices article, I may use “Using copyrighted material for illustration or example.”

In Ridolfo and Rife’s article, the most interesting thing is that we must think about the possibilities of alternative uses that basically anything we do could hold. Even if we may have a very specific idea of the purpose of anything we are doing, pictures/videos/media could be taken and used in a totally different manner. However, it is sometimes difficult to think of all the possibilities of reuse that someone could do. The possibilities are endless.

For the first best practice I mentioned, I could use this in my video project by using photos or videos of real people who have gone through solitary confinement, retrieved from Creative Commons, to tell their stories and histories. This can also help educate the audience about mental atrocities that can happen because of this system. It will help me make a point/an argument about how solitary confinement can lead to self-harm and suicide.

I imagine someone could reuse part of my video to further support ending solitary confinement, ending the death penalty, and/or changing the justice system in general. Someone could also use pieces of my project to say that ending solitary confinement will never happen and that people deserve to suffer in solitary because they committed crimes and need to be punished.

Yes, I would be willing to license my video under Creative Commons so people can reuse my work because I think more people need to learn about this issue and do something about it.

Video Project Proposal

  1. I would like to open my video with a story about a victim of solitary confinement. I will show a picture of them along with some voiceovers. I would like this to be a real life person – not something I just make up. I would like to show video, images, and text throughout, such as jail keys, footsteps, statistics, and prisoner stories.
  2. Since this project started, I have been doing research on solitary confinement and the effects it has on mental health. For my audio project, I was really able to use statistics and facts about these effects in an educational format. I think I can use some of the same material in my video project, especially the statistics. I am hoping to emphasize them with text instead of just saying them aloud.
  3. The only time I have created a video like this was my junior year in high school, so I am a little worried about using software and how good the quality of my project will be. I use iMovie for a marketing project in high school, and that is the same software I will be using for this project. So hopefully I remember some skills from way back when.

Anatomy of a Good Advocacy Video

I think that the Anatomy of Good Advocacy is a great advocacy video because it provides real life stories, still images, moving images (video), an action step, pictures, text, music, and sound effects. For my project, I think I will also use music, an interchange of still and moving images, and an action step. I also like how this advocacy video used text fading in and out of the screen to show facts about rape in the military with white text on a black screen. I think this is really efficient to get their message across, so I would like to do something similar with solitary confinement facts. I also like how they included real life victims/survivors of rape in their advocacy video. I would like to do something similar in my solitary confinement video but I do not have anyone to interview. Therefore, I would like to tell someone’s story without having to do an interview.

Sonic Strategies

MUSIC: I am including music throughout my audio piece. Starting from the beginning, I have piano playing. The first few seconds, the piano repeats itself. After this, a new piece of piano begins to play and continues throughout the entire piece. I chose piano because it can create a somber tone, which compliments the theme of my project: solitary confinement.

SILENCE: I tried to incorporate silence into my piece by pausing after each sentence of group of sentences I read. I was hoping for this to create an ambiance.

SOUND EFFECTS: I used sound effects of a cell door closing at both the beginning and the end of my piece. At the beginning, I used this sound to draw the attention of the audience. At the end, I used this to close out the piece. It also flowed with my last sentence (close the door on solitary confinement).

SOUND INTERACTION: In my piece I include music, sound effects, and voice. These sounds interact with one another because I use layering. At the beginning, I use piano and the sound of a cell door closing. Then piano plays as my voice talks about solitary confinement. I had to duck the music a bit so my voice could be heard. Layering allows for the interaction between sounds to be more professional-sounding if done correctly.

VOICE: My voice is the main part of the piece. I define solitary confinement, say a couple facts about it, mention some statistics, and tell the audience how they can take action to end it. I think the pace of my voice is good and the info is easy to follow. I try to use inflection in my voice to emphasize certain things as well.

Feedback I Received, 4/4

The feedback I received was critical yet praising. They both enjoyed the music and emotion throughout the piece. They suggest that I duck the music a little more to make my voice clearer. I was also complimented on the research I put into the project by both providing historical information and psychological statistics. I could also even the volume throughout because the beginning is louder than the rest of the piece. The recommendations I got could be easily implemented, but I would also like to do something to improve my sound quality, which they did not comment on. I am also wondering if the piece made them want to take action. Overall, I think their feedback was helpful and complimentary, which is a good feeling.